Persuasive Writing - Why We Should Fix Our Field.

We have been having a go at writing a piece of persuasive writing. Here is my piece of writing about why we should fix our field.

Title A Short Statement about the topic. eg. ‘Rugby League Is A Great Sport’	I Think we should fix our field.
Overview/ Statement of position A brief statement of your view about the topic.  What you believe or want to argue.	I strongly think we should fix our field. We need to fix the field because it was to muddy and wet so we can’t do our school events and school games. Karoro school needs it’s field fixed
Series of Arguments Reasons Your points supporting your view about the topic.  Your arguments to support your statement and information to support these arguments. Remember -argument -supporting detail, reasons, examples	Firstly,  I think we should fix our field at first because I saw a lot of people slipping over and getting all muddy.
	Secondly, it to fix the field because  it was used for our sports and events like the gala, hangi, sports,  sports training, cross country practise, to play with P.E gear, equipment and game time.
	Thirdly, the field needs to be fixed. It needs to be fixed because the teachers might not have any time to get the kids balls that went over the fence so the kids might get Pouri and Riri. Also sometimes when a ball goes over the fence it takes a long time to get it back.
	Finally, I strongly believe we don’t want people to get injured by falling over on the concrete and getting hit in the face by a ball.
Concluding statement Summing it up.  A summary of your arguments and your view on the topic.	In conclusion we need to fix our field because we need it to do sport and events and for lots of other reasons gala, hangi and matariki are all other think we need the field for. Also we need the field because many people don’t want to get muddy. Also another reason is that many children won’t want there ball to go over the fence because it will take long to get it back and if we had a field when the ball was over the fence we could still be playing with it. Lastly, my last reason is that people don’t want to trip over on concrete and get badly hurt. It is a good plan to have fields at school. I enjoy school fields because they are fun.