Planet Writing

Create and Describe Your Own Planet -
Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make my writing interesting and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my writing interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic specific words to include in my writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a descriptive piece of writing to promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to convince people to move to your planet. You want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie. Click here to get to video= Pandora.

Second, we will discuss together what you will need in your work to make it successful and look at how to plan our work. Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing. Remember to proof-read (check spelling and punctuation) and edit (does it make sense? do you need to change any sentences?) yourself and with a buddy and fill in your self and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.

Then share your work on your blog.

My writing 

Morta is a giant pōwhatu (Stone/Rock) planet a little bit bigger than Saturn. It is orbiting around a star about the size of our sun.

It is far from the star so there are 4 tiny suns around the planet. Because of this there is no day and night on Morta. There are only 2 planets in the solar system Zoo Tropic and Morta. Zoo Tropic is closest to the sun. The storms on this planet are not as bad as the Earth ones because of the technology they have. On the technology you can’t download any games because people know how bad they are for you. There is a space shuttle from Morta to Zoo tropic.

From Earth it takes a year to get there in a super fast rocket because it is in a solar system close to ours outside of the Oort cloud. In morta the life looks cute and fluffy but actually the life is very deadly unless you tame them. The animals names are Canla, ponla, unluurlo, pundo, yungoeand tini. The fluffiest ones are curlo and pundo. The water tastes like Tropical Flavoured Juice but if you heat it it tastes like water and of course you can cool it down. Sometimes you can find bouncy grass bouncier than a twelve foot trampoline. The grass feels smooth and prickles don’t prick. If you have sore feet you can put them in karaehe and they will feel better because the karaehe (Grass) lets off some chemicals that can help with pain. The bouncy karaehe doesn’t help at all with sore feet. All you eat is delicious juicy fruit which is very filling.

By Korban

Self and Peer Assessment

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my writing interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic specific words to include in my writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Success criteria 1: I have used some language features to make my writing interesting and engaging (smile, metaphor, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

        

                          Achieved well Achieved some    Achieved little Not achieved

Me
My partner

Success criteria 2: I have carefully chosen some topic specific words to include in my writing.

        

                          Achieved well Achieved some    Achieved little Not achieved

Me
My partner

Success criteria 3: I have some Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

        

                          Achieved well Achieved some    Achieved little Not achieved

Me
My partner